An evening, after class, Joon got ready to leave. He walked quickly out of his class. Accidentally, he bumped into someone.....
"AW!!!! I'm so sorry!"
She kept bowing and apologizing. Joon responded....
"That's ok! That's ok!"
Joon looked at her face and exclaimed....
"Hey! You're the girl from last time! What are you doing here?"
She lifted her face and responded suprisingly...
"Joon senpai!!! Hmmm... I'm... I'm looking for Jumi senpai."
At the same time, Jumi walked out of the class.....
"Eh... Misa!!"
"Jumi sepai!!"
"What are you doing here?"
"Hmmmmm.... There is a festival at a high school. I'm coming to ask if you can go with me. Are you free senpai?"
Jumi looked a bit hesitant but she couldn't refuse since she didn't want to upset Misa....
"Um.... Yeah I'm free. I've never been to other schools' festivals before. This is my opportunity."
Jumi said and smiled. Immediately Kei walked passed them, Jumi called him...
"Kei!"
Kei glanced at them. He raised his eyebrow a bit once he saw Joon was also there. Jumi smiled at him. She turned back at Misa and said...
"Misa! Since Joon and Kei are here, would you mind if I invite them along?"
"No of course not. It would be more fun if there are many people."
Jumi looked at Kei and Joon and said...
"Kei! Joon! There is a festival at a school. Would you like to come with us?"
They looked a bit hesitant. But once they looked into Jumi's eyes, they realized they couldn't refuse this invitation...............
Along with Joon and Kei, Jumi and Misa were walking in the surrounding area of their high school. Misa had realized that people had been staring at them since she started to walk with Joon, Jumi and Kei. By looking at Joon, Jumi and Kei, Misa noticed that they were really standing out among the students. They are the spot of interest. Due to Jumi's beauty and her modest character, Joon's attractiveness and his sweet smile, Kei's manly behavior and his handsomeness, people were attracted by them, including Misa herself. Misa thought of what had happened a month ago once she first attended this high school. The first day she came to school, she saw a lovely girl with white skin and long black hair. She was walking alone in 2nd year school uniform. She always keeps a beautiful smile on her face. Misa admitted that even she herself is a girl but she couldn't help being attracted by that girl's beauty. The girl realized Misa was looking at her. Misa was a bit surprised as the girl was looking back at her. She smiled sweetly at Misa and walked toward the 2nd year building. When Misa was walking in the school hall, she kept hearing people talking about a girl name Jumi. She heard that Jumi is a beautiful girl but she's got a quiet character and she's very popular. In her mind, she was thinking that Jumi is an arrogant girl. She hadn't realized how Jumi looks like until the school festival day once Jumi was announced as the school princess. That day was the first time Misa realized that Jumi and the girl she had met on the first day at school were the same person. The day Jumi rescued her was the moment she realized how kind and caring Jumi is. ......
Having arrived at the festival, Jumi and Misa were really excited. They were holding hand and having fun together. Unlike Joon and Kei who were in an awkward moment because of what had happened earlier. During the time Jumi and Misa was having fun, a tall guy walked toward them and grabbed Jumi's hand.
"Hey pretty girls! There are only 2 of you? Don't you feel lonely? Do you need someone to hang out with, baby?"
"BOMP!!!!!!"
A sound of punch came right after the guy's speech which caused the turmoil of people around. Jumi and Misa exclaimed...
"Kei!!!"
"Kei senpai!"
The guy fell to the ground. His mouth was bleeding. He touched his mouth slightly and said with anger...
"You rascal!!!"
Kei was about to punch him one more time but Jumi prevented....
"That's enough Kei! Come on! Let's get out of here!"
Kei glared at the guy and said.....
"Don't let me see your face again!"
Joon, Jumi, Kei and Misa were walking back home. Misa spoke out with guiltiness....
"I'm so sorry senpai. I shouldn't have invited you there. I brought you guys into trouble."
Jumi responded kindly...
"That's ok Misa! It's not your fault."
Immediately, Joon's phone rang. He picked it up and spoke in a low voice. He hung up the phone and said...
"Something urgent came up. I'm sorry I have to go first."
Jumi said...
"It's ok! Good luck Joon!"
"Thank you! You too!"
Before leaving, Joon walked toward Kei and spoke to him in a very low voice until it can't be heard by people around....
"Your hot temper will always be bringing trouble to people around you."
He said and walked away. Kei was taken aback by what Joon had just said...
A moment later....
"Thanks for today, Jumi senpai and Kei senpai. Goodbye! Be careful on your way home."
Misa said and bowed a bit. Jumi responded...
"Goodbye Misa. You too. Take care."
After Misa's leaving, Kei offered to walk Jumi home...
"Jumi! Where did you go yesterday morning?"
"Yesterday morning!? Ummmm... Ohh.. I met a childhood friend. So I just had a little talk with her."
Jumi nervously responded.....
"Is that so?"
After dropping Jumi at her house, Kei walked alone and thought.....
"Why did she have to lie? Is there really something between her and that guy?"
As Joon arrived home, he saw a girl was sitting with his mother in the living room. He sighed and walked in. Her mother introduced.....
"Joon! This is Kaho. She's your dad's friend's only daughter. She's a 1st year student of a high school."
She smiled at Joon and said...
"Hello Joon! Nice to meet you."
Joon smiled a bit and responded...
"Hello Nice to meet you too!"
A moment later......................
Kaho had already left. Joon dragged his bag and stood up. His mother spoke up......
"Joon! What do you think of Kaho?"
He responded...
"Mum! How many times do I have to tell you that I'm not interested in this kind of thing? It's just useless dragging me into this issue. I'm not interested in any girls even if you're bringing me a perfect one."
He said and walked away. Her mum sighed and said.....
"Joon! How long do you think you will hold on to your first love? It's useless."
Joon turned stiff. He felt like something had been broken inside. He looked at his mum with eyes full of pain and said...
"Mum! You don't know how important she is to me. I will be holding on to her for the rest of my life.".........................
Tomorrow morning at school, in the quiet corner of the building, a group of girls from last time were surrounding Misa once again....
"Do you think having Joon and Jumi around, we can't do anything to you? You're such a weak girl getting close to them just to get their protection?"
Misa responded....
"You can say whatever you want. People like you guys are just too free to have time to bully another."
"How dare you!"
The girl strongly slapped Misa. She fell the the ground. She raised her head and said....
"Does this make you happy??? Then slap me more!!!"
"You!! You!!"
The girl raised her hand in order to slap Misa again. But someone grabbed her hand and said calmly....
"Stop it!"
The girl turned back and exclaimed...
"JOON!!!"
He sighed and said....
"Hmmmm... Looks like I've caught you bullying another again. I think I should inform the head officer about this, don't you think so Miss Ruri Nishikori from 2nd year class 5?"
The girl was startled with how Joon had found out about her. Joon continued....
"You know there will be no second time for people like you. You should be ready for the punishment."
They said nothing but walked quickly out of there with anger....
Misa spoke up....
"Thank you so much, senpai. You're helping me again."
"Never mind! Are you ok?"
"Yeah! I'm fine."
Misa stood up and.......
"Aw!!!"
She fell back. Joon touched her ankle slightly....
"Ouch!!!"
"Hmmm... looks like your ankle is twisted. The infirmary is quite far. You can't walk in this condition."
"I'm ok, senpai!"
Joon had no choice. He said.....
"Get on my back. I'll carry you there."
Misa was very surprised...................
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To be continued
JuLina JooNieJooLie
Stay tune to the episode 17 :)
Heh... This 16 episode is more longer than other....
ReplyDelete1st paragraph: A high school festival
-Why did Misa know about that festival??? from her friend or near her house, but when they arrived there, I don't see u mention about Misa's friend???
-I feel a little strange when Misa invited Jumi on the festival day.(It should be one day before)
-Jumi's behavior was not like other time. Why did she so happy with that festival??? (she should hesitate).
2nd paragraph: I think u should put this sentence " Due to Jumi's beauty.........including Misa herself......"
between (They are the spot of interest.(here) Misa thought of what had happened a month ago)
3rd paragraph: I think a boy who grabbed Jumi's hand should get up and fight back...(I suggest u to make the situation in the festival be more longer and surprising.
4th paragraph: Conversation between Jumi and Kei
-they should have more topic relating to(festival, what did Joon's talk to him and the one u have mentioned)
5th paragraph: I'm really surprise and want to laugh when I read ur sentence "My son! You're 18 now ......it anymore." I suggest u to give other reason...:)
6th paragraph: I suggest u to put this paragraph in episode 17. As I think, u want to attract ur reader to wait ur episoce 17 by linking this one. Is that right???
-When I read ur episode, I feel that there are not connecting to this paragraph and I wonder why there are so many unusual situation happening. If it happened on Kei it's ok cuz there was a conflict in the festival the night before...
Sorry for having a lot of comments, if it doesn't make sense to u. Please don't mind....^-^
I'm sorry to say this... But I don't really agree with your ideas this time... Sometimes the part of my story is connected to the part in next episode....... About the fighting with Kei and that guy, if I let him get up and fight Kei back, the part in another episode will be nothing... About the other parts, I know i'm lacking some points. I'll make sure to check it out again.
ReplyDeleteI know u want to connect the ideas to the next episode cuz u have mentioned about Joon's sentence "Your hot temper will always be bringing trouble to people around you.". I don't mean to ask u to change "The guy get up and fight Kei back". I just ask u to add some actions in that situation and it's also connect to ur next episode.. :)
ReplyDeletereally? but u said "I think a boy who grabbed Jumi's hand should get up and fight back"... I had spent almost 12 hours to post this episode. I'm sorry that I can't fulfill your request. Coz I really have no idea what to add more. If you have some ideas, can u provide me some? Looks like I'm not really good enuf to find some more actions to add... I'm truly sorry.
ReplyDeleteIt looks like u r getting upset :):) haha... I have thought u would be unhappy since the first time I started to comment on ur episode cuz the ways I wrote were not so polite and had a lot comments. U can wait until now is so strange. I know u have calm down urself a lot. thanks...^-^
ReplyDeleteIdeas of people are really different, u can take my idea at first time it's really pleasant me. When we talk about general idea, there are many people have the same idea. But when we go into more details, there are several. It'll be no one having the same if we continue to the most detail, because we use our own thinking and feeling to just it.
Either I'm getting upset or not, it's just what's inside my mind. But I've been writing this novel for people to read. I don't mind even though people give me ideas or criticize my ideas. Because I already knew that these things would happen.....
ReplyDeleteIt's really good to know u have prepared in advance like that :)
ReplyDeleteSorry that last time I've commented only what I think are ur incomplete ideas. Next time I'll comment on both side (good and bad).
It's my first to write more comments like that so I don't know how to make u feel warm with my comments. I'll try to improve it.
(Haha.. I'm a negative person, I always see the mistake of everyone including myself. As I know myself, I still fail in changing it. Too bad...)
Just be yourself. You don't have to force urself to gimme some positive comments. Coz it won't be making me improve or have confidence to continue at all. I'm sorry I know I shouldn't have felt upset over your comments about my own lack points but I just could't help it. Sometimes the difficulties are too strong to bear. I can't help losing confidence. I can't help feeling upset. It's right when you said people's ideas are really different. But sometimes I just want people to understand what I include in my story. That just hurt me so much when people ask me to explain the part in the story. Looks like everything I've been trying really hard to do is just nothing even readers can't catch the meaning. Are my ideas that different? You always say that I can take your ideas or not is up to me. How can I ignore reader's comments if I've been writing this novel for readers to read? Usually I'm a kind of person who try very hard not to hurt people's feeling with my words. I don't like to criticize their ideas. Some little mistakes are ok with me. I just tell them some big mistakes which they have to correct. I know how difficult they've been through to find each ideas. I can't break their heart with the little words of mine. So I don't really understand what you think or what's inside your mind coz you're too different from me. But I've been through a lot. It's still ok to bear with your negative comments about my lacking points. I've figured out that people are hard to understand and sometimes their words are too harsh to bear. But I decided to write this novel so it means I have to stand strong to accept negative comments from the readers.
ReplyDeleteI'm truly sorry to tell you all these. But I just can't help feeling upset. I'm just hoping that having told you these could make me feel better or I guess not....'
Only if there is one person in this world who understands me, I guess that would be enuf....
Thanks for having read my novel up until now......
JuLinA
Hi Julina! there are many readers who have read ur episode, including me. I can understand what u mean in the novel that why I didn't leave any comments. Ur episodes are not really good, but it can be understand and I like to read. U r not the professional writer so u'll make some mistakes. It's normal.
ReplyDeleteWhat are the problems? Don't let one person break ur confidence! There are many other people who like it.
I hope u understand what I have wrote and continue ur novel until the end and also write other novels..
I'm happy to read ur novel and I'm also one of ur fans.:):) sou sou
Dear Kakda,
ReplyDeletePeople's words are able to make me losing confidence easily. But that doesn't mean I'm giving up. I'm coming this far, I can't go back or stop here. I don't know how people feel about my novel. But the feeling I've put into this novel is too deep. It's deep until no one can break it nor make me giving up....
Thanks for the encouraging words of yours and thanks for reading my novel....
I'm happy to know u r so strong with it. Oh when will the next episode be??? Can I guess what will happen for ur next episode??? :)
ReplyDeleteSure.... You can guess!!! :) the next ep will be released on saturday...
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