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Friday, May 28, 2010

You are my Endless Memory: episode 4 ""My hero""

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Jumi fell strongly to the ground and scratched her knee. It started to bleed. Aliza snatched Jumi's bag and took everything out of her bag until she found Jumi's worksheet....
"He is my endless memory, huh? What is this? I wonder how you will explain to teacher if you don't have this."
Aliza said and teared the worksheet into pieces....
Jumi's tear started to drop.....
"Aliza! Why are you doing this?"
Aliza laughed and said....
"You stupid girl! You really don't know why? I wonder what is so good about you. You are just a weak dumb girl. Why everyone likes you so much? Why teachers like you more than me? Why Joon loves you and always protect you? Why you always get higher scores than me? Why you always win? Why it's always you? Why? Why?"
Jumi cried and said....
"Listen to me! You know everyone in the class is the same. Our teacher loves her students equally. As long as you try, you will always be success. The important thing is the effort you put in it. Studying is not about winning or losing."
"Shut up! I don't need to be told. You better save up your voice for screaming for help once I lock you in this room. Jumi! I hate you! You're such a burden to everyone! Especially Joon! You can not survive without Joon's help! I want to know what you can do without Joon by your side!"
Jumi looked at Aliza with tearful eyes and thought....
"I couldn't ask for Joon's help anymore. Every time I'm with him, I'm always a burden to him."..........
"Who told you Jumi is a burden to me?".....
A voice came out from behind the door. As she heard the voice, Aliza looked back and felt a bit shocked....
"Joon! Why are you here?"
"I'm the one who should ask you that question! Why are you here? What have you done to Jumi, huh?"
"I... I.. I haven't done anything. Joon! You don't have to protect her. She's a horrible girl who can't do anything on her own. She only pretends to be a nice girl."
Joon responded with angry voice......
"Shut up Aliza! Jumi is not a burden to me and she never will. She's never asked for my help. But I'm the one who's willing to protect her. You wanna win her that much? Have you lost your mind? Do you think you can defeat her by doing this? Jumi can defeat you fairly and she can win without doing anything dirty like what you have done. You know what even you win this time, you're still a miserable loser."
"Joon! You lost your mind!"
"Aliza! If you dare to do something to Jumi again, I will never go easy on you. You better hurry back to class if you wanna defeat us that badly."
Aliza glared at Jumi with angry face and ran out of there.....
"Jumi! Are you ok?"
Jumi responded with a low voice....
"I'm fine! You don't have to protect me every time. I'm such a burden to you."
Her teardrops kept falling down from her eyes. Joon responded....
"You silly kid! You believe that girl? She only lied to you. Trust me! You will never be a burden to me."...
He wiped her tears and hugged her...
"Stop crying Jumi! As long as I'm here, I will always protect you!"....................

Joon got her on his back and walked out of the room....
"Joon! I'm sorry!"
"Why?"
"I've lost the worksheet. I'm so sorry."
"That's ok. Don't worry about it."
Jumi responded...
"No! That's not ok. I have to do something about this. I can't drag you into trouble with me. Joon! Where are you taking me to?"
"The infirmary! of course!"
"Why? We have to hurry back to class. I have to do something. I can't let you lose your scores."
"Jumi! Can you concern about yourself more than anyone else? Your knee is bleeding. Don't you see? How can I leave it like that?"
"That's ok. I can bear with it. I can't bring you into trouble with me. Please Joon! Do it for me this time."....
Joon had no choice than bringing her back to class.....
"Sorry teacher! We're late!".... A boy with a girl on his back apologized to teacher with tiring voice and sweat all over his face.............

To be continued
JuLinA JooNieJooLie

6 comments:

  1. 1st Paragraph: "Shut up Aliza! Jumi is not a burden to me. She's never asked for my help. But I'm the one who's willing to protect her.
    - In this sentence, I feel that it's not good. When Joon said like that, it means Jumi is really weak and need someone to help her.. Do u catch my point?

    2nd Paragraph: Aliza glared at Jumi with angry face and ran out of there.....
    - This one is a good action of gangster

    3rd Paragraph: Jumi's knee was bleeding.
    -I think u add this action to the paragraph when Aliza pushed Jumi. It'll make that paragraph more meaning.
    -I suggest u to add how long she was late at school (late a little bit or really late).

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  2. 1st paragraph...

    Jumi is not a strong girl.....

    3rd paragraph...
    I'll check that part out again...

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  3. I accept ur idea but I would like to show my idea. U should show Jumi's weakness was her strong points cuz Joon loves Jumi.

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  4. Last night u've tried a lot. In order to add ideas to connect ur previous point, it's not easy. But u can done it. Good job...

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  5. Hmmm... the boy really is a hero....

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